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(Aug. 08, 2021 6:36 PM)Dragon Blader Z Wrote: [ -> ]I'll work on this fanfic after Destruction
Probably you'll be surprised
You probably shouldn't open a thread on a Fanfic that will start on a long time, but hey, that's just me.
Aug. 08, 2021 7:05 PM
Chapter 1 Part 1
Bey of Chaos!!! Chaos Storm.
Hanami: Hello beyfans!!! Today we'll have a battle in the dynamite drive stadium.
Hanami: First is Valt Aoi!!!.
Valt: Let's do this!!!.
Hanami: And next is Bell!!!.
Bell: You won't beat me, The Demon King.
Ref: Ready, and set.
Bell and Valt: 3, 2, 1, LET IT RIP!!!.
(Belial goes near the center.)
Hanami: Belial is kinda doing the Rush Shoot.
Valt: Attack him Valkyrie!!!.
Bell: Belial Counter it, Dynamite Counter.
Valt: Attack!!!.
(Belial and Valkyrie are hitting each other in a flurry of attacks.)
Bell: BELIAL!!!.
Valt: VALKYRIE!!!.
(Both avatars appear.)
Bell: Dynamite Bomber!!!.
Valt: Shot Upper!!!.
(Belial gets ringed out.)
Ref: It's Savior Valkyrie with over finish Valt wins.
Valt: Yes!!!.
Bell: I'll get you next round.
Ref: Ready, and set.
Bell and Valt: 3, 2, 1, LET IT RIP!!!.
Valt: Rush Shoot!!!.
Bell: Venture Shoot!!!.
(They hit each other again in a flurry of attacks.)
Valt: VALKYRIE!!!.
(Valkyrie's avatar appears.)
Bell: BELIAL!!!.
(Belial's avatar appears.)
Valt: Shot Upper!!!.
Bell: Dynamite Bomber!!!.
(Valkyrie bursts.)
Ref: It's Dynamite Belial with burst finish bell wins the match.
Kenny: Watching TV was good, now time to create a beyblade!!!.
(Kenny finishes.)
Kenny: It's done!!! Chaos Storm.
Preview:
Kenny: I'm going to battle.
???: I'll battle with you.
Kenny: Alright!!!
Next Time on Beyblade Burst: Final Moments
Kenny vs ???.
Kenny: 3, 2, 1, LET IT RIP!!!.
Bey of Chaos!!! Chaos Storm.
Hanami: Hello beyfans!!! Today we'll have a battle in the dynamite drive stadium.
Hanami: First is Valt Aoi!!!.
Valt: Let's do this!!!.
Hanami: And next is Bell!!!.
Bell: You won't beat me, The Demon King.
Valt: Yeah i will!!!.
Ref: Ready, and set.
Bell and Valt: 3, 2, 1, LET IT RIP!!!.
(Belial goes near the center.)
Hanami: Belial is kinda doing the Rush Shoot.
Valt: Attack him Valkyrie!!!.
Bell: Belial Counter it, Dynamite Counter.
Valt: Attack!!!.
(Belial and Valkyrie are hitting each other in a flurry of attacks.)
Bell: BELIAL!!!.
Valt: VALKYRIE!!!.
(Both avatars appear.)
Bell: Dynamite Bomber!!!.
Valt: Shot Upper!!!.
(Belial gets ringed out.)
Ref: It's Savior Valkyrie with over finish Valt wins.
Valt: Yes!!!.
Bell: I'll get you next round.
Ref: Ready, and set.
Bell and Valt: 3, 2, 1, LET IT RIP!!!.
Valt: Rush Shoot!!!.
Bell: Venture Shoot!!!.
(They hit each other again in a flurry of attacks.)
Valt: VALKYRIE!!!.
(Valkyrie's avatar appears.)
Bell: BELIAL!!!.
(Belial's avatar appears.)
Valt: Shot Upper!!!.
Bell: Dynamite Bomber!!!.
(Valkyrie bursts.)
Ref: It's Dynamite Belial with burst finish bell wins the match.
Kenny: Watching TV was good, now time to create a beyblade!!!.
(Kenny finishes.)
Kenny: It's done!!! Chaos Storm.
Preview:
Kenny: I'm going to battle.
???: I'll battle with you.
Kenny: Alright!!!
Next Time on Beyblade Burst: Final Moments
Kenny vs ???.
Kenny: 3, 2, 1, LET IT RIP!!!.
Aug. 08, 2021 7:07 PM
Nice grammar but there was No periods work on that!
Aug. 08, 2021 7:07 PM
I'll edit it
I added periods
and the opening
Let's fight till we get tired.
We'll believe in our beys.
This will be your final moment (Moment!!!)
Let's fight in a revolution!!!
Bring the evil to your side (pure evil)
Battle at your max (max)
Now bring the evil down
Beyblade, beyblade, fight for your reward (reward)
Take a journey (to the top)
Now let's finish this off
Beyblade Burst: Final Moment
I added periods
and the opening
Let's fight till we get tired.
We'll believe in our beys.
This will be your final moment (Moment!!!)
Let's fight in a revolution!!!
Bring the evil to your side (pure evil)
Battle at your max (max)
Now bring the evil down
Beyblade, beyblade, fight for your reward (reward)
Take a journey (to the top)
Now let's finish this off
Beyblade Burst: Final Moment
Aug. 08, 2021 10:34 PM
(Aug. 08, 2021 7:05 PM)Dragon Blader Z Wrote: [ -> ]Chapter 1 Part 1
Bey of Chaos!!! Chaos Storm.
Hanami: Hello beyfans!!! Today we'll have a battle in the dynamite drive stadium.
Hanami: First is Valt Aoi!!!.
Valt: Let's do this!!!.
Hanami: And next is Bell!!!.
Bell: You won't beat me, The Demon King.
Valt: Yeah i will!!!.
Ref: Ready, and set.
Bell and Valt: 3, 2, 1, LET IT RIP!!!.
(Belial goes near the center.)
Hanami: Belial is kinda doing the Rush Shoot.
Valt: Attack him Valkyrie!!!.
Bell: Belial Counter it, Dynamite Counter.
Valt: Attack!!!.
(Belial and Valkyrie are hitting each other in a flurry of attacks.)
Bell: BELIAL!!!.
Valt: VALKYRIE!!!.
(Both avatars appear.)
Bell: Dynamite Bomber!!!.
Valt: Shot Upper!!!.
(Belial gets ringed out.)
Ref: It's Savior Valkyrie with over finish Valt wins.
Valt: Yes!!!.
Bell: I'll get you next round.
Ref: Ready, and set.
Bell and Valt: 3, 2, 1, LET IT RIP!!!.
Valt: Rush Shoot!!!.
Bell: Venture Shoot!!!.
(They hit each other again in a flurry of attacks.)
Valt: VALKYRIE!!!.
(Valkyrie's avatar appears.)
Bell: BELIAL!!!.
(Belial's avatar appears.)
Valt: Shot Upper!!!.
Bell: Dynamite Bomber!!!.
(Valkyrie bursts.)
Ref: It's Dynamite Belial with burst finish bell wins the match.
Kenny: Watching TV was good, now time to create a beyblade!!!.
(Kenny finishes.)
Kenny: It's done!!! Chaos Storm.
Preview:
Kenny: I'm going to battle.
???: I'll battle with you.
Kenny: Alright!!!
Next Time on Beyblade Burst: Final Moments
Kenny vs ???.
Kenny: 3, 2, 1, LET IT RIP!!!.
wow this kinda looks like episode 1 for beyblade burst destiny but hey thats just me
Aug. 09, 2021 12:09 AM
I feel that in beyblade burst: Final moments Phi and Hyde will reappear and have revealed to have trained the antagonist.
They should get their own beys as well
Infernal Phoenix and imprisoned Hades
They should get their own beys as well
Infernal Phoenix and imprisoned Hades
Aug. 09, 2021 1:39 PM
maybe I'll do that
Aug. 09, 2021 1:53 PM
I have a lot of ideas so if that one won't work I'll come up with something else.
Aug. 09, 2021 1:57 PM
Chapter 1 Part 2
Kenny vs ???
Kenny: I'll have my first battle!!!
Hanami on TV: Hello beyfans!!! want to get in your first battle, come to the Rainbow Tree Arena for your first battle.
Kenny: Ok, I will.
(Kenny comes to the arena)
Hanami: Kid your first battle is against Renzo Kiyama.
Renzo: You little kid is my first battle alright.
Kenny: Yes I get to battle!!!.
Ref: Ready, and set
Kenny and Renzo: 3, 2, 1, LET IT RIP!!!
(Tornado Ragnaruk goes to the center)
Kenny: Storm!!! go attack Ragnaruk!!!
Kenny: Chaos Attack!!!
Renzo: Stamina Tornado!!!
(Storm gets flown into the air after the tornado)
Kenny: STORM!!!
(Storm's avatar appears)
Renzo: RAGNARUK!!!
(Ragnaruk's avatar appears)
Kenny: Chaos Sword!!!
Renzo: Double Wing Cyclone
(Storm gets ringed out)
Ref: It's Tornado Ragnaruk with over finish Renzo wins
Renzo: I'll beat you again
Kenny: No you won't.
Ref: Ready, and set
Kenny and Renzo: 3, 2, 1, LET IT RIP!!!
Kenny: Storm!!! Chaos Launch
Renzo: Max Tornado!!!
(Storm hits Ragnaruk in a flurry of attacks and Ragnaruk bursts)
Ref: Chaos Storm wins with burst finish, Kenny wins the match.
Kenny: Yes!!! I won my first battle
Preview:
Kenny: I'll battle my friend!!!
Danny: Ok, battle me now.
Kenny: Ooh!!! This battle is getting interested.
Kenny: Next time on Beyblade Burst: Final Moment
Kenny battles Danny
Kenny and Danny: 3, 2, 1, LET IT RIP!!!
I thought of a name for pheonix
Inferno Phoenix'
Kenny vs ???
Kenny: I'll have my first battle!!!
Hanami on TV: Hello beyfans!!! want to get in your first battle, come to the Rainbow Tree Arena for your first battle.
Kenny: Ok, I will.
(Kenny comes to the arena)
Hanami: Kid your first battle is against Renzo Kiyama.
Renzo: You little kid is my first battle alright.
Kenny: Yes I get to battle!!!.
Ref: Ready, and set
Kenny and Renzo: 3, 2, 1, LET IT RIP!!!
(Tornado Ragnaruk goes to the center)
Kenny: Storm!!! go attack Ragnaruk!!!
Kenny: Chaos Attack!!!
Renzo: Stamina Tornado!!!
(Storm gets flown into the air after the tornado)
Kenny: STORM!!!
(Storm's avatar appears)
Renzo: RAGNARUK!!!
(Ragnaruk's avatar appears)
Kenny: Chaos Sword!!!
Renzo: Double Wing Cyclone
(Storm gets ringed out)
Ref: It's Tornado Ragnaruk with over finish Renzo wins
Renzo: I'll beat you again
Kenny: No you won't.
Ref: Ready, and set
Kenny and Renzo: 3, 2, 1, LET IT RIP!!!
Kenny: Storm!!! Chaos Launch
Renzo: Max Tornado!!!
(Storm hits Ragnaruk in a flurry of attacks and Ragnaruk bursts)
Ref: Chaos Storm wins with burst finish, Kenny wins the match.
Kenny: Yes!!! I won my first battle
Preview:
Kenny: I'll battle my friend!!!
Danny: Ok, battle me now.
Kenny: Ooh!!! This battle is getting interested.
Kenny: Next time on Beyblade Burst: Final Moment
Kenny battles Danny
Kenny and Danny: 3, 2, 1, LET IT RIP!!!
(Aug. 09, 2021 12:09 AM)Dread hades12 Wrote: [ -> ]I feel that in beyblade burst: Final moments Phi and Hyde will reappear and have revealed to have trained the antagonist.
They should get their own beys as well
Infernal Phoenix and imprisoned Hades
I thought of a name for pheonix
Inferno Phoenix'
Aug. 09, 2021 2:21 PM
That's a perfect name
And then it could evolve into Extinct phoenix
And THEN phi would turn evil
And then it could evolve into Extinct phoenix
And THEN phi would turn evil
Aug. 09, 2021 3:20 PM
let's not talk more about the thing so we'll continue in pm's
Aug. 09, 2021 3:31 PM
ngl there's so little detail, But I believe you'll improve.
Aug. 09, 2021 3:31 PM
I'm changing the name for chapter 2 part 1 from Kenny battles danny to
System Battle!!! DynaSpark vs Flare
System Battle!!! DynaSpark vs Flare
Aug. 09, 2021 3:45 PM
ayo man wassup
so uh who is danny?
so uh who is danny?
Aug. 09, 2021 3:49 PM
When I made my first fanfic the main character's name was Danny
Aug. 09, 2021 3:50 PM
(Aug. 09, 2021 3:49 PM)Dragon Blader Z Wrote: [ -> ]When I made my first fanfic the main character's name was Danny
ohhh he's returning! nice
so his bey must be kitsune
Aug. 09, 2021 3:50 PM
yes it is kitsune
Aug. 25, 2021 3:01 PM
also danny will be e______ his bey.
Chapter 2 Part 1
System Battle!!! DynaSpark vs Flare
Kenny: Yay!!! I won!!!
Renzo: You're just lucky, but next time I'm going to win, and I will make sure that I do by training myself with power and launching 1,000 times!!!
Kenny: That will be too much to handle, and instead of launching 1,000 times, do it 500 times.
Renzo: Ok.
(Kenny goes back home)
Kenny: That battle was amazing!!!
(A few hours later)
(Somebody comes in)
Kenny: Hello?
Danny: It's me, Danny
Kenny: Phew, I thought you were a ghost for a second there.
Danny: Are you scared of ghosts?
Kenny: Yes, and don't make fun of me for it!!!
Danny: Alright, but I came here for something else.
Kenny: For what?
Danny: A beybattle of course, and battle my Flame Kitsune!!!
Kenny: You created a new bey hmm.
Danny: No I created it before you!!!
Kenny: Meet Chaos Storm!!!
(Danny in his thoughts)
Danny: Ok, the bey has three blades that will have harder impact when they are awakened.
(Danny goes back to real life)
Kenny: Let's battle now!!!
Danny: Alright.
Kenny: It's first to 2 points, alright.
Danny: Ok.
Kenny and Danny: 3, 2, 1, LET IT RIP!!!
Danny: Flame Defense!!!
Kenny: Chaos Launch!!!
(Kitsune is deflecting Storm's barrage of attacks)
(later in the battle)
Danny: KITSUNE!!!
(Kitsune is shiny and glowing like fire, Kitsune activates Shiny Fire-Flux)
Kenny: STORM!!!
(Storm's avatar happens, and Storm is glowing purple and blue, Storm activates Flare-Flux)
Danny: Shining Upper!!!
Kenny: Flare of the Cosmos!!!
(Kitsune and Storm are hitting each other and they keep hitting in different directions)
Danny and Kenny: AHHHHHHH!!!
(Storm bursts)
Kenny: Ahh man!!!
Danny: You did good though.
Kenny: I did!!!
Danny: Yes you did!!!
Kenny: Good job on winning.
Danny: Thanks Kenny!!!
Kenny: Your welcome.
Preview:
Kenny: What!!! Dante Koryu is here!!!
Danny: I'll stay here then for a few days.
Kenny: Yay Danny!!!
Next time on Beyblade Burst: Final Moment
Chapter 2 Part 2
The Dragon Tamer!!! Dante Koryu
Kenny and Danny: 3, 2, 1, LET IT RIP!!!
For this character contest I'll be accepting 10 people and when the contest is over there is going to be top 4
1. (Blank)
2. Lucha Burst
3.
4.
5.
6.
7.
8.
9.
10.
Chapter 2 Part 1
System Battle!!! DynaSpark vs Flare
Kenny: Yay!!! I won!!!
Renzo: You're just lucky, but next time I'm going to win, and I will make sure that I do by training myself with power and launching 1,000 times!!!
Kenny: That will be too much to handle, and instead of launching 1,000 times, do it 500 times.
Renzo: Ok.
(Kenny goes back home)
Kenny: That battle was amazing!!!
(A few hours later)
(Somebody comes in)
Kenny: Hello?
Danny: It's me, Danny
Kenny: Phew, I thought you were a ghost for a second there.
Danny: Are you scared of ghosts?
Kenny: Yes, and don't make fun of me for it!!!
Danny: Alright, but I came here for something else.
Kenny: For what?
Danny: A beybattle of course, and battle my Flame Kitsune!!!
Kenny: You created a new bey hmm.
Danny: No I created it before you!!!
Kenny: Meet Chaos Storm!!!
(Danny in his thoughts)
Danny: Ok, the bey has three blades that will have harder impact when they are awakened.
(Danny goes back to real life)
Kenny: Let's battle now!!!
Danny: Alright.
Kenny: It's first to 2 points, alright.
Danny: Ok.
Kenny and Danny: 3, 2, 1, LET IT RIP!!!
Danny: Flame Defense!!!
Kenny: Chaos Launch!!!
(Kitsune is deflecting Storm's barrage of attacks)
(later in the battle)
Danny: KITSUNE!!!
(Kitsune is shiny and glowing like fire, Kitsune activates Shiny Fire-Flux)
Kenny: STORM!!!
(Storm's avatar happens, and Storm is glowing purple and blue, Storm activates Flare-Flux)
Danny: Shining Upper!!!
Kenny: Flare of the Cosmos!!!
(Kitsune and Storm are hitting each other and they keep hitting in different directions)
Danny and Kenny: AHHHHHHH!!!
(Storm bursts)
Kenny: Ahh man!!!
Danny: You did good though.
Kenny: I did!!!
Danny: Yes you did!!!
Kenny: Good job on winning.
Danny: Thanks Kenny!!!
Kenny: Your welcome.
Preview:
Kenny: What!!! Dante Koryu is here!!!
Danny: I'll stay here then for a few days.
Kenny: Yay Danny!!!
Next time on Beyblade Burst: Final Moment
Chapter 2 Part 2
The Dragon Tamer!!! Dante Koryu
Kenny and Danny: 3, 2, 1, LET IT RIP!!!
For this character contest I'll be accepting 10 people and when the contest is over there is going to be top 4
1. (Blank)
2. Lucha Burst
3.
4.
5.
6.
7.
8.
9.
10.
Sep. 11, 2021 12:44 AM
wow nothing
Sep. 11, 2021 1:07 AM
(Sep. 11, 2021 12:44 AM)Dragon Blader Z Wrote: [ -> ]wow nothing
I'll come up with something, but now I need to sleep.
Sep. 11, 2021 1:58 AM
idk about a character, i'll post one tomorrow
Sep. 11, 2021 2:01 AM
ok I was just checking after a week of not being here
Sep. 11, 2021 2:37 PM
(Aug. 08, 2021 10:34 PM)GenesisBlader Wrote: [ -> ](Aug. 08, 2021 7:05 PM)Dragon Blader Z Wrote: [ -> ]Chapter 1 Part 1
Bey of Chaos!!! Chaos Storm.
Hanami: Hello beyfans!!! Today we'll have a battle in the dynamite drive stadium.
Hanami: First is Valt Aoi!!!.
Valt: Let's do this!!!.
Hanami: And next is Bell!!!.
Bell: You won't beat me, The Demon King.
Valt: Yeah i will!!!.
Ref: Ready, and set.
Bell and Valt: 3, 2, 1, LET IT RIP!!!.
(Belial goes near the center.)
Hanami: Belial is kinda doing the Rush Shoot.
Valt: Attack him Valkyrie!!!.
Bell: Belial Counter it, Dynamite Counter.
Valt: Attack!!!.
(Belial and Valkyrie are hitting each other in a flurry of attacks.)
Bell: BELIAL!!!.
Valt: VALKYRIE!!!.
(Both avatars appear.)
Bell: Dynamite Bomber!!!.
Valt: Shot Upper!!!.
(Belial gets ringed out.)
Ref: It's Savior Valkyrie with over finish Valt wins.
Valt: Yes!!!.
Bell: I'll get you next round.
Ref: Ready, and set.
Bell and Valt: 3, 2, 1, LET IT RIP!!!.
Valt: Rush Shoot!!!.
Bell: Venture Shoot!!!.
(They hit each other again in a flurry of attacks.)
Valt: VALKYRIE!!!.
(Valkyrie's avatar appears.)
Bell: BELIAL!!!.
(Belial's avatar appears.)
Valt: Shot Upper!!!.
Bell: Dynamite Bomber!!!.
(Valkyrie bursts.)
Ref: It's Dynamite Belial with burst finish bell wins the match.
Kenny: Watching TV was good, now time to create a beyblade!!!.
(Kenny finishes.)
Kenny: It's done!!! Chaos Storm.
Preview:
Kenny: I'm going to battle.
???: I'll battle with you.
Kenny: Alright!!!
Next Time on Beyblade Burst: Final Moments
Kenny vs ???.
Kenny: 3, 2, 1, LET IT RIP!!!.
wow this kinda looks like episode 1 for beyblade burst destiny but hey thats just me
Just a warning I did not copy you I made this up myself 100%
Sep. 11, 2021 3:08 PM
This whole thing feels rushed take your time to go into detail I felt no emotion, No offense it’s just that you need to make the characters more life like probably put spoilers for when your making a chapter and make it long! Add some more plot, and The Dialogue is clear but DRUM IS COMING SO SOON? I suggest take some time!
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