[Fan Fiction]  Beyblade: Metal Burst (Its finally here!)

This is a thread for a Fanfiction I have been working on for the past two or three months. It's also my first!

It is set about 3 years after DB, and beys can now be able to not burst, or burst, depending on the rules stated.
So far, I have made 4 Episodes, but I will not release them all at the same time; I will release one episode every 1- 2 weeks.
Because I'm the only person working on this, publishing deadlines will and can change due to school.

In between the episode's releases, I will continue to make the plot and episodes.


In-depth overview of the new system will be released soon.

Overview is here!

New Episodes will be posted on Thursdays - Fridays

Contest will only begin when I hit my 7th or 10th episode publishing
Episode One will be released tomorrow! If all goes well, that is.
I have a series with the same concept! Although, my version of the beys burst. You wouldn't be able to call it Beyblade Burst without bursting.
(Jul. 07, 2022  5:17 AM)TylerOfChaos Wrote: I have a series with the same concept! Although, my version of the beys burst. You wouldn't be able to call it Beyblade Burst without bursting.

Ah, I see.

The system does allow beyblades to burst but only if the bladers choose to do so in battle (as stated in the overview). Maybe I wasn't as clear there. Ill have a quick look again, and name some of the sections of the Overview to make it easier to read.

Episode 1 is now out!

Its not my best episode, but quality will totally get better as the season advances.
Please leave what you think about this chapter! ^-^
-WizardBlader
My personal bey is called Terrios, the Dragon of Chaos. If you can, maybe we can battle!

And pretty good for a first episode
(Jul. 08, 2022  7:55 AM)TylerOfChaos Wrote:
And pretty good for a first episode

Thanks for the review Smile
(Jul. 08, 2022  6:10 PM)WizardBlader Wrote:
(Jul. 08, 2022  7:55 AM)TylerOfChaos Wrote:
And pretty good for a first episode

Thanks for the review Smile

No problem bro
(Jul. 07, 2022  12:15 PM)WizardBlader Wrote:
(Jul. 07, 2022  5:17 AM)TylerOfChaos Wrote: I have a series with the same concept! Although, my version of the beys burst. You wouldn't be able to call it Beyblade Burst without bursting.

Ah, I see.

The system does allow beyblades to burst but only if the bladers choose to do so in battle (as stated in the overview). Maybe I wasn't as clear there. Ill have a quick look again, and name some of the sections of the Overview to make it easier to read.

Episode 1 is now out!

Its not my best episode, but quality will totally get better as the season advances.
Please leave what you think about this chapter! ^-^
-WizardBlader

Why does this Aleck Character remind me of Sanji This was a pretty Good First Chapter but I feel like it was weird how you introduced the Main Character since he seemingly appeared like a Side-Character and this First Chapter didn't really feel like a First Chapter tbh. It felt like a Chapter to introduce a Side-Character that would happen in the middle of the story. But this was also pretty good and the details were also pretty good so for a First Chapter it wasn't awful but it wasn't amazing either. You should know that your Story is at the beginning area so you need to make it feel like it is the beginning by slowly introducing Characters one by one and making it clear who the Main Protag is since I personally couldn't tell. Great start to the story besides these details and I feel like there is some great potential in this story so I'll be keeping tabs on this. Nice Work so far though!
(Jul. 09, 2022  6:00 AM)IUnseenBurst Wrote:
(Jul. 07, 2022  12:15 PM)WizardBlader Wrote: Ah, I see.

The system does allow beyblades to burst but only if the bladers choose to do so in battle (as stated in the overview). Maybe I wasn't as clear there. Ill have a quick look again, and name some of the sections of the Overview to make it easier to read.

Episode 1 is now out!

Its not my best episode, but quality will totally get better as the season advances.
Please leave what you think about this chapter! ^-^
-WizardBlader

Why does this Aleck Character remind me of Sanji This was a pretty Good First Chapter but I feel like it was weird how you introduced the Main Character since he seemingly appeared like a Side-Character and this First Chapter didn't really feel like a First Chapter tbh. It felt like a Chapter to introduce a Side-Character that would happen in the middle of the story. But this was also pretty good and the details were also pretty good so for a First Chapter it wasn't awful but it wasn't amazing either. You should know that your Story is at the beginning area so you need to make it feel like it is the beginning by slowly introducing Characters one by one and making it clear who the Main Protag is since I personally couldn't tell. Great start to the story besides these details and I feel like there is some great potential in this story so I'll be keeping tabs on this. Nice Work so far though!
Thanks for the review! For this chapter, I wanted to introduce Benjamin and Xaviero a bit slower, and keep the focus on the MB system. Maybe I overdid what was I felt for the chapter, and should’ve made the main characters have more ‘screen-time’.

I’ll revise the other chapters to perhaps prevent this from happening,
-WizardBlader
Episode Two is out!

Leave a review, to let me know how this one is!
-WizardBlader
(Jul. 14, 2022  12:17 PM)WizardBlader Wrote: Episode Two is out!

Leave a review, to let me know how this one is!
-WizardBlader

First off, I'm really liking the more down-to-earth conversations/dialogue you put in, it gives off a human vibe to the characters but it isn't too casual to stray off from Beyblade's usual style. But what I noticed from the first chapter and this was that the battles were quite short, so maybe extend them a bit and don't rely too much on special moves. Overall, it's a nice story so far and I'm looking forward to whatever you put out following this.
(Jul. 14, 2022  2:15 PM)SpeedySuomi Wrote:
(Jul. 14, 2022  12:17 PM)WizardBlader Wrote: Episode Two is out!

Leave a review, to let me know how this one is!
-WizardBlader

First off, I'm really liking the more down-to-earth conversations/dialogue you put in, it gives off a human vibe to the characters but it isn't too casual to stray off from Beyblade's usual style. But what I noticed from the first chapter and this was that the battles were quite short, so maybe extend them a bit and don't rely too much on special moves. Overall, it's a nice story so far and I'm looking forward to whatever you put out following this.

Thanks for the review! Ill try my best to implement the suggestions you provided in later chapters!

Thanks again,
-WizardBlader
Episode 3!

Leave a review! ^^

Edit: FYI, I might not be posting new episodes in August, but we'll have to see what happens then.
Episode 4!

Leave a review! ^^
'Fraid I won't be releasing the 5th episode today. I have it all written out on a computer, but as fate would have it, I didn't finish the Chapter off in a way I wanted it to go. (Also, I had a whole lot of school to focus on, which prohibited me from doing it better)

I will hopefully be releasing it maybe this Friday? Anyways, I'm extremely sorry to anyone who was waiting for the 5th Episode.

Apologies,
-WizardBlader
After a day of waiting, Episode 5 is here! I tried to work on it as best and as quick as I could, so there might be a few misses here, and there.

Episode 5

And as always, don't hesitate to review the Chapter!
Sorry for posting so late! I hadn't finished the Chapter earlier today, so I had to work overtime to make sure I hit the deadline today.

This is definitely my longest Chapter ever, might be just a tiny bit monotonous??? If it is, please leave why, and what should be improved on later chapters.

Episode 6:

(Aug. 12, 2022  5:04 AM)WizardBlader Wrote: Sorry for posting so late! I hadn't finished the Chapter earlier today, so I had to work overtime to make sure I hit the deadline today.

This is definitely my longest Chapter ever, might be a bit boring??? If it is, please leave why, and what should be improved on later chapters.

Episode 6:


I'm really interested in this, when are you releasing more of Beyblade: Metal Burst?
(Aug. 12, 2022  1:48 PM)Dragon Blader Z Wrote:
(Aug. 12, 2022  5:04 AM)WizardBlader Wrote: Sorry for posting so late! I hadn't finished the Chapter earlier today, so I had to work overtime to make sure I hit the deadline today.

This is definitely my longest Chapter ever, might be a bit boring??? If it is, please leave why, and what should be improved on later chapters.

Episode 6:


I'm really interested in this, when are you releasing more of Beyblade: Metal Burst?
I'm glad you're interested in this series! ^^

I try my best to release episodes once a week, on either a Thursday, or a Friday. Fridays are only when I haven't worked on the chapter how I wanted it to go, and I had to work extra.
when are you releasing next episode, most likely Thursday and Friday
(Aug. 12, 2022  6:39 PM)WizardBlader Wrote:
(Aug. 12, 2022  1:48 PM)Dragon Blader Z Wrote: I'm really interested in this, when are you releasing more of Beyblade: Metal Burst?
I'm glad you're interested in this series! ^^

I try my best to release episodes once a week, on either a Thursday, or a Friday. Fridays are only when I haven't worked on the chapter how I wanted it to go, and I had to work extra.
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Just don't sacrifice quality over it, that's a common mistake. Take your time when you need to and don't fear being late with chapters that much.
(Aug. 14, 2022  4:47 PM)Dragon Blader Z Wrote: when are you releasing next episode, most likely Thursday and Friday

Yes, either Thursday or Friday. It might be a tad bit later this time.

(Aug. 14, 2022  11:50 PM)Hollowmind8 Wrote:
(Aug. 12, 2022  6:39 PM)WizardBlader Wrote: I'm glad you're interested in this series! ^^

I try my best to release episodes once a week, on either a Thursday, or a Friday. Fridays are only when I haven't worked on the chapter how I wanted it to go, and I had to work extra.
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Just don't sacrifice quality over it, that's a common mistake. Take your time when you need to and don't fear being late with chapters that much.

Thanks for the advice. I appreciate it a lot.
FYI, this episode will be very late, as I've been trying to concentrate on school the entire week (As my mother wished me to do so), instead of working of the 7th Episode.
Ill try to begin work on it when I'm able to, bit by bit.

Apologies,
-WizardBlader
(Aug. 16, 2022  6:05 PM)WizardBlader Wrote: FYI, this episode will be very late, as I've been trying to concentrate on school the entire week (As my mother wished me to do so), instead of working of the 7th Episode.
Ill try to begin work on it when I'm able to, bit by bit.

Apologies,
-WizardBlader
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School is more important, so no apologies needed. Take care of your life before everything else, else you won't be able to do the "everything else" good (if at all)
(Aug. 16, 2022  10:22 PM)Hollowmind8 Wrote:
(Aug. 16, 2022  6:05 PM)WizardBlader Wrote: FYI, this episode will be very late, as I've been trying to concentrate on school the entire week (As my mother wished me to do so), instead of working of the 7th Episode.
Ill try to begin work on it when I'm able to, bit by bit.

Apologies,
-WizardBlader
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School is more important, so no apologies needed. Take care of your life before everything else, else you won't be able to do the "everything else" good (if at all)
Thank you so much for understanding! ^^

I appreciate the advice a lot. Smile

-WizardBlader

To make up for my lack of Episode publishing, Ill release a few episode titles this week, and next week if necessary, to give a small sneak peek into the future.

Episode 7: Training at BC Sol! Starting over with the basics! (Part 1)

Episode 8: Training at BC Sol! Almighty Raphael! (Part 2)

Episode 9: Training at BC Sol! A True Bonding Experience? (Part 3?)

Episode 10: Return to New York! Rematch with Shu Kurenai!

Episode 11: The Ultimate Challenge?! The Tag-Team Metal League!

Episode 12: Preparations! Blizzard Ragnarök?!