Oh, BuilderROB criticize this story please!
Beyblade Burst Spirit (Character Contest Over, Winners Announced)
(Aug. 22, 2020 5:27 PM)CheetoBlader Wrote: Oh, BuilderROB criticize this story please!
Ok then.
Grammar: 4/5
Story: 3/5
Characters: 3/5
Dialogue: 4/5
Length: 3/5
Total: 17/25
This story does have flaws. It’s still decent, but still. The characters did show a bit more of themselves other than all Beyblade, which I appreciated. Dialogue was also good. Length is...inconsistent. Some chapters would be really long and some shorter. In my opinion, it’s best to have a consistent length for your chapters. The story itself is a bit basic, being that they go to a Bey Camp and battle other bladers. I mean, it’s not bad, but it’s also not that good.
![[Image: 88-E6-FCCC-E8-AF-48-FB-A3-F2-32-E31-D8-DDA09.jpg]](https://i.postimg.cc/q7DDdNkV/88-E6-FCCC-E8-AF-48-FB-A3-F2-32-E31-D8-DDA09.jpg)
![[Image: 84-CB9286-C306-4-D2-D-B3-E2-CD380-EA5-E132.jpg]](https://i.postimg.cc/sgfQnGSM/84-CB9286-C306-4-D2-D-B3-E2-CD380-EA5-E132.jpg)
(Aug. 22, 2020 5:41 PM)BuilderROB Wrote:Nods slowly Uh-huh, okay, got it. Thanks!(Aug. 22, 2020 5:27 PM)CheetoBlader Wrote: Oh, BuilderROB criticize this story please!
Ok then.
Grammar: 4/5
Story: 3/5
Characters: 3/5
Dialogue: 4/5
Length: 3/5
Total: 17/25
This story does have flaws. It’s still decent, but still. The characters did show a bit more of themselves other than all Beyblade, which I appreciated. Dialogue was also good. Length is...inconsistent. Some chapters would be really long and some shorter. In my opinion, it’s best to have a consistent length for your chapters. The story itself is a bit basic, being that they go to a Bey Camp and battle other bladers. I mean, it’s not bad, but it’s also not that good.
Well, hehe it’s been exactly a year now since the last chapter, but I’m happy to say that I have a laptop to use now, and I’m currently planning out some of it, so I guess look forward to more news later!
yeah its awesome
the story u know
the story u know
So I have chapters 1-11 planned out, so I can either start writing, and figure something out, or finish planning. What’re y’all’s thoughts?
(Sep. 03, 2020 7:52 PM)Logic123ABC Wrote:I meant like take a small planning hiatus in case I haven’t done it yet.(Sep. 03, 2020 7:34 PM)CheetoBlader Wrote: So I have chapters 1-11 planned out, so I can either start writing, and figure something out, or finish planning. What’re y’all’s thoughts?
Planning it out will make the whole story much more enjoyable. I say plan it out but that might just be me.
Just posting some updates that I’ve also posted off site here lol.
Character Name Reveals #1:
Tyler Warden
Reagan Kuqier
Harold Laberdol
Rantara Kiyama
But the questions are: who is the main character, or is the main character even listed? Are all of them main characters? How much “screen time” will each of them get? Just some food for thought.
Next update will be on Friday, unless this post gets three likes. Then it’ll be Wednesday. (Not to “like beg” or anything like that. Just sayin’)
Character Name Reveals #1:
Tyler Warden
Reagan Kuqier
Harold Laberdol
Rantara Kiyama
But the questions are: who is the main character, or is the main character even listed? Are all of them main characters? How much “screen time” will each of them get? Just some food for thought.
Next update will be on Friday, unless this post gets three likes. Then it’ll be Wednesday. (Not to “like beg” or anything like that. Just sayin’)
Time for another reveal:
Character Name Reveals #2:
Mark Denpart
Fawn Dalso
Jojo Apoloian
Thomas Jones
Roan Jamieson
But the questions are: who is the main character, or is the main character even listed? Are all of them main characters? How much “screen time” will each of them get? Just some food for thought.
Next update will be on Sunday, unless this post gets three likes. Then it’ll be Friday. (Not to “like beg” or anything like that. Just sayin’)
Character Name Reveals #2:
Mark Denpart
Fawn Dalso
Jojo Apoloian
Thomas Jones
Roan Jamieson
But the questions are: who is the main character, or is the main character even listed? Are all of them main characters? How much “screen time” will each of them get? Just some food for thought.
Next update will be on Sunday, unless this post gets three likes. Then it’ll be Friday. (Not to “like beg” or anything like that. Just sayin’)
(Sep. 16, 2020 2:30 PM)CheetoBlader Wrote: Time for another reveal:
Character Name Reveals #2:
Mark Denpart
Fawn Dalso
Jojo Apoloian
Thomas Jones
But the questions are: who is the main character, or is the main character even listed? Are all of them main characters? How much “screen time” will each of them get? Just some food for thought.
Next update will be on Sunday, unless this post gets three likes. Then it’ll be Friday. (Not to “like beg” or anything like that. Just sayin’)
Cool reveal can't wait to see what happens
![[Image: 107-D2464-D868-4-CE2-A859-686-EE150-EB1-A.png]](https://i.postimg.cc/mD6NwgGm/107-D2464-D868-4-CE2-A859-686-EE150-EB1-A.png)
(Sep. 16, 2020 2:30 PM)CheetoBlader Wrote: Time for another reveal:
Character Name Reveals #2:
Mark Denpart
Fawn Dalso
Jojo Apoloian
Thomas Jones
Roan Jamieson
But the questions are: who is the main character, or is the main character even listed? Are all of them main characters? How much “screen time” will each of them get? Just some food for thought.
Next update will be on Sunday, unless this post gets three likes. Then it’ll be Friday. (Not to “like beg” or anything like that. Just sayin’)
Do it. I’m your third like. DO IT NOOOOW.
(Sep. 16, 2020 10:26 PM)GreenK9148 Wrote:Lol no. You get the next spicy reveal on Friday.(Sep. 16, 2020 2:30 PM)CheetoBlader Wrote: Time for another reveal:
Character Name Reveals #2:
Mark Denpart
Fawn Dalso
Jojo Apoloian
Thomas Jones
Roan Jamieson
But the questions are: who is the main character, or is the main character even listed? Are all of them main characters? How much “screen time” will each of them get? Just some food for thought.
Next update will be on Sunday, unless this post gets three likes. Then it’ll be Friday. (Not to “like beg” or anything like that. Just sayin’)
Do it. I’m your third like. DO IT NOOOOW.
Now its 4 likes should I like?