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RE: Beyblade Neo Frontline (Beyblade Story) - HolyPhoenix5 - Oct. 24, 2014 (Oct. 24, 2014 10:11 PM)KirbyRobot Wrote:(Oct. 24, 2014 12:40 AM)HolyPhoenix5 Wrote:WHAT CHARACTER ARE YOU TALKING ABOUT!?? SRSLY!? WHO!!????(Oct. 23, 2014 3:21 PM)KirbyRobot Wrote: *sigh* I get this alot. Again, I said this in my argument with Neo/Dual. I try my best. And how am I supposed to get basic character development, in the first 3 parts? I already started, but just slightly. Also THE CHARACTER? Uhhh... okay? which character? If you mean Neo, I've already just started to expand on him, my best. As for Naomi, Jason, Maxim (I think, I don't really remember, it's been a while ), Neo's mother, and Neo's cousin? Well Naomi will get more of a backstory soon enough, and I want to keep Jason untouched for a while. Maxim won't really appear again for a while, but I intend on doing more with Dawson (Neo's cousin) and his Mother. Sorry gtg I have school Neo, of course.... Also don't type in all caps because it makes you look too angry and raged up. RE: Beyblade Neo Frontline (Beyblade Story) - Jinbee - Oct. 25, 2014 (Oct. 24, 2014 12:40 AM)HolyPhoenix5 Wrote:(Oct. 23, 2014 3:21 PM)KirbyRobot Wrote:(Oct. 21, 2014 6:50 PM)HolyPhoenix5 Wrote: this....needs a lot of work.....too much grammatical errors and the story doesn't develop the character in the right pace.*sigh* I get this alot. Again, I said this in my argument with Neo/Dual. I try my best. And how am I supposed to get basic character development, in the first 3 parts? I already started, but just slightly. Also THE CHARACTER? Uhhh... okay? which character? If you mean Neo, I've already just started to expand on him, my best. As for Naomi, Jason, Maxim (I think, I don't really remember, it's been a while ), Neo's mother, and Neo's cousin? Well Naomi will get more of a backstory soon enough, and I want to keep Jason untouched for a while. Maxim won't really appear again for a while, but I intend on doing more with Dawson (Neo's cousin) and his Mother. Sorry gtg I have school Ah yeah I see what you mean. RE: Beyblade Neo Frontline (Beyblade Story) - Cyvern - Oct. 25, 2014 From here on out, I don't want any complaints about my characters, or PLOT. Grammar and english mistakes you can point out but I own the series. I can develop a character more if I want. If you want to find out how the character looks in MY mind, wait 'till the end of the series. When I finish I will create a picture of ALL of the characters, including their beys. So, I will look over replies, any complaints about the story plot, I WILL SKIP OVER. Any complaints about character development, I WILL SKIP OVER. Okay? OK. I'm not trying to be a pain in the neck, so please don't be offended. ALSO! As for help with the series, I might PM you if I want help, you will get credit for Supporting Story Writer. But most the time, I won't need help. I appreciate the praise and criticism (got down the definition. Mixed it up with another word sorry ). FINALLY! Don't ask to be included, if I want to include you, I will PM you, another thing to add for my last bit is, DO NOT ASK FOR YOUR OC TO BE INCLUDED!!!!!!!! I WILL ASK YOU IF YOU WANT YOUR OC INCLUDED IN NEO FRONTLINE. Okay I'm done https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=mNrXMOSkBas (watch this video with your eyes closed pls) RE: Beyblade Neo Frontline (Beyblade Story) - Jinbee - Oct. 25, 2014 Heh perhaps I'll make Capricorn Shock as my Mecha Sentoki Beyblade haha I'm only joking, but I think the story is still good, and just keep doing it, I will inked grammatical errors as long as can just sit down and read the atory. RE: Beyblade Neo Frontline (Beyblade Story) - Classik - Oct. 25, 2014 (Oct. 25, 2014 4:37 AM)KirbyRobot Wrote: From here on out, I don't want any complaints about my characters, or PLOT. Grammar and english mistakes you can point out but I own the series. I can develop a character more if I want. If you want to find out how the character looks in MY mind, wait 'till the end of the series. When I finish I will create a picture of ALL of the characters, including their beys. So, I will look over replies, any complaints about the story plot, I WILL SKIP OVER. Any complaints about character development, I WILL SKIP OVER. Okay? OK. I'm not trying to be a pain in the neck, so please don't be offended. ALSO! As for help with the series, I might PM you if I want help, you will get credit for Supporting Story Writer. But most the time, I won't need help. I appreciate the praise and criticism (got down the definition. Mixed it up with another word sorry ). FINALLY! Don't ask to be included, if I want to include you, I will PM you, another thing to add for my last bit is, DO NOT ASK FOR YOUR OC TO BE INCLUDED!!!!!!!! I WILL ASK YOU IF YOU WANT YOUR OC INCLUDED IN NEO FRONTLINE. Okay I'm done https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=mNrXMOSkBas (watch this video with your eyes closed pls)I don't think you of all people can tell people what they can write and cannot write I only say this because your not a mod (nor am I) and therefore you don't have power over what people write. RE: Beyblade Neo Frontline (Beyblade Story) - Jinbee - Oct. 25, 2014 (Oct. 25, 2014 6:03 PM)Kazuto. Wrote:Is this about me or HolyPhoenix5?(Oct. 25, 2014 4:37 AM)KirbyRobot Wrote: From here on out, I don't want any complaints about my characters, or PLOT. Grammar and english mistakes you can point out but I own the series. I can develop a character more if I want. If you want to find out how the character looks in MY mind, wait 'till the end of the series. When I finish I will create a picture of ALL of the characters, including their beys. So, I will look over replies, any complaints about the story plot, I WILL SKIP OVER. Any complaints about character development, I WILL SKIP OVER. Okay? OK. I'm not trying to be a pain in the neck, so please don't be offended. ALSO! As for help with the series, I might PM you if I want help, you will get credit for Supporting Story Writer. But most the time, I won't need help. I appreciate the praise and criticism (got down the definition. Mixed it up with another word sorry ). FINALLY! Don't ask to be included, if I want to include you, I will PM you, another thing to add for my last bit is, DO NOT ASK FOR YOUR OC TO BE INCLUDED!!!!!!!! I WILL ASK YOU IF YOU WANT YOUR OC INCLUDED IN NEO FRONTLINE. Okay I'm done https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=mNrXMOSkBas (watch this video with your eyes closed pls)I don't think you of all people can tell people what they can write and cannot write RE: Beyblade Neo Frontline (Beyblade Story) - Classik - Oct. 25, 2014 (Oct. 25, 2014 6:06 PM)JinbeeTheShark Wrote:This is about Kirby(Oct. 25, 2014 6:03 PM)Kazuto. Wrote:Is this about me or HolyPhoenix5?(Oct. 25, 2014 4:37 AM)KirbyRobot Wrote: From here on out, I don't want any complaints about my characters, or PLOT. Grammar and english mistakes you can point out but I own the series. I can develop a character more if I want. If you want to find out how the character looks in MY mind, wait 'till the end of the series. When I finish I will create a picture of ALL of the characters, including their beys. So, I will look over replies, any complaints about the story plot, I WILL SKIP OVER. Any complaints about character development, I WILL SKIP OVER. Okay? OK. I'm not trying to be a pain in the neck, so please don't be offended. ALSO! As for help with the series, I might PM you if I want help, you will get credit for Supporting Story Writer. But most the time, I won't need help. I appreciate the praise and criticism (got down the definition. Mixed it up with another word sorry ). FINALLY! Don't ask to be included, if I want to include you, I will PM you, another thing to add for my last bit is, DO NOT ASK FOR YOUR OC TO BE INCLUDED!!!!!!!! I WILL ASK YOU IF YOU WANT YOUR OC INCLUDED IN NEO FRONTLINE. Okay I'm done https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=mNrXMOSkBas (watch this video with your eyes closed pls)I don't think you of all people can tell people what they can write and cannot write RE: Beyblade Neo Frontline (Beyblade Story) - Dual - Oct. 25, 2014 (Oct. 25, 2014 4:37 AM)KirbyRobot Wrote: From here on out, I don't want any complaints about my characters, or PLOT. Grammar and english mistakes you can point out but I own the series. I can develop a character more if I want. If you want to find out how the character looks in MY mind, wait 'till the end of the series. When I finish I will create a picture of ALL of the characters, including their beys. So, I will look over replies, any complaints about the story plot, I WILL SKIP OVER. Any complaints about character development, I WILL SKIP OVER. Okay? OK. I'm not trying to be a pain in the neck, so please don't be offended.It's called criticism, not complaints. If you don't want people to tell you how you can make your story better, why are you posting it here? RE: Beyblade Neo Frontline (Beyblade Story) - Jinbee - Oct. 25, 2014 Cool! It's not about me! Anyways, I think you should nicely ask someone to give criticisms more civilized, if you hate complaints that much. The reason I do OK is because I learn from Fan Series masters like Dual, and get advice from him and others, it helps. RE: Beyblade Neo Frontline (Beyblade Story) - LOL-y Rancher - Oct. 25, 2014 KirbyRobot...calm down! If someone wants to point out flaws to make the series better then you cannot stop them. What did you make this thread for? To show off and expect the thread to blossom entirely with compliments? RE: Beyblade Neo Frontline (Beyblade Story) - HolyPhoenix5 - Oct. 26, 2014 i think the big problem is the characters identities are focused more than it's storyline, so I am not sure what's going on. RE: Beyblade Neo Frontline (Beyblade Story) - Cyvern - Oct. 26, 2014 (Oct. 26, 2014 12:47 AM)HolyPhoenix5 Wrote: i think the big problem is the characters identities are focused more than it's storyline, so I am not sure what's going on.I'm so confused. Disclaimer; Part 4 is canceled, for now. I don't feel like getting anymore out there right now. But feel free to point out mistakes, I'll fix 'em up. If I ever do feel like finishing the series it may only go on to part 6. -Kirby EDIT; To fix things up a bit, I've made a list of 12 different replies Kindness in Criticism Spoiler (Click to View) Spoiler (Click to View) RE: Beyblade Neo Frontline (Beyblade Story) - HolyPhoenix5 - Oct. 26, 2014 what's with the kindness ratings? i thought you said you would ignore other criticism??? RE: Beyblade Neo Frontline (Beyblade Story) - Cyvern - Oct. 26, 2014 (Oct. 26, 2014 12:59 PM)HolyPhoenix5 Wrote: what's with the kindness ratings?You know what!? The kindness ratings, are how polite/kind you are with critism. A 6 is great, it means you weren't rude. A 1 is something like this "Omg this story sucks it has waaaay to much grammar mistakes, requesting mod lock." Not something very nice to say. I'd think you'd understand "Kindness in Criticism" sorry for being a bunghole. RE: Beyblade Neo Frontline (Beyblade Story) - HolyPhoenix5 - Oct. 26, 2014 (Oct. 26, 2014 1:47 PM)KirbyRobot Wrote:(Oct. 26, 2014 12:59 PM)HolyPhoenix5 Wrote: what's with the kindness ratings?You know what!? The kindness ratings, are how polite/kind you are with critism. A 6 is great, it means you weren't rude. A 1 is something like this "Omg this story sucks it has waaaay to much grammar mistakes, requesting mod lock." Not something very nice to say. I'd think you'd understand "Kindness in Criticism" sorry for being a bunghole. errr you say many people are 1 in kindness, yet no-one is THAT bad and no one asked his to be closed. We're trying to help you but you are the one rude to us. RE: Beyblade Neo Frontline (Beyblade Story) - ☆★Unikitty★☆ - Oct. 26, 2014 I'd like to know what rating we each got. RE: Beyblade Neo Frontline (Beyblade Story) - Jinbee - Oct. 26, 2014 Look, we'll try to be nicer in the future, as long as you do the same. RE: Beyblade Neo Frontline (Beyblade Story) - Shido-kun - Oct. 26, 2014 Also one thing;this might get closed if people kept arguing. RE: Beyblade Neo Frontline (Beyblade Story) - Jinbee - Oct. 26, 2014 (Oct. 26, 2014 1:55 PM)Yato-San Wrote: Also one thing;this might get closed if people kept arguing. I honestly don't want that to happen, this series has potential so we shall stop arguing, though Kirby sometimes takes it too harshly. EDIT: Or I just work on Neo frontline for him haha. RE: Beyblade Neo Frontline (Beyblade Story) - Cyvern - Oct. 26, 2014 I read over and polished the story a bit, if you notice any mistakes (in grammar) notify me. Sorry everybody, I was a huge bunghole before. (Oct. 26, 2014 1:59 PM)JinbeeTheShark Wrote:Yeah, I'm kind of sensitive. So some things urk me a bit more than others.(Oct. 26, 2014 1:55 PM)Yato-San Wrote: Also one thing;this might get closed if people kept arguing. RE: Beyblade Neo Frontline (Beyblade Story) - Cyvern - Oct. 26, 2014 Part 4 might be coming today! That is if my laptop wants to be done charging. But when part 4 does come out, it will be extra long, and hopefully have no grammar problems EDIT; going to ask some peeps to help with this one! I'm going to need it. So if you want to help pm me. RE: Beyblade Neo Frontline (Beyblade Story) - Cyvern - Oct. 28, 2014 Part 4 sneak-peek coming out! Part 4 will (hopefully) get released soon, with the help of DUAL the great! And Jinbee! But what role will they play in the helping of the part of the series!? You'll see :3 EDIT; DUAL it's too busy RE: Beyblade Neo Frontline (Beyblade Story) - Dual - Oct. 28, 2014 Wait what? I said I couldn't even though I liked to. Like I said, I can't even work on my own stories I'm so busy. Sorry. RE: Beyblade Neo Frontline (Beyblade Story) - Cyvern - Oct. 28, 2014 (Oct. 28, 2014 4:18 AM)Dual Wrote: Wait what? I said I couldn't even though I liked to. Like I said, I can't even work on my own stories I'm so busy. Sorry.oh, ok RE: Beyblade Neo Frontline (Beyblade Story) - Jinbee - Oct. 28, 2014 What do I do for this story then? Do I help write? Make a character? What is it? |