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[Beyblade Story] Throughout the Beyges - Printable Version

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[Beyblade Story] Throughout the Beyges - Scout25 - Dec. 12, 2012

This is my beyblade story! Enjoy!
Note: if you vote that this story is bad, please tell me why you think so. That way I can improve and hopefully make this story the best it can be.

Chapter 1
Chapter 2



RE: My beyblade story: Throught the Beyges. - Dual - Dec. 12, 2012

Pretty good start! Maybe the battles could have been described more but overall good. Also, when Scout s thinking, it should be in italics. Can't wait for chapter 2!


RE: My beyblade story: Throughout the Beyges. - Scout25 - Dec. 12, 2012

I wasn't sure how to do italics....do you know how? Thanks.


RE: My beyblade story: Throughout the Beyges. - Dual - Dec. 12, 2012

When you do a full edit, a bar will appear over the text showing different things. Press the i to begin and i again to end.


RE: [Beyblade Story] Throughout the Beyges - Scout25 - Dec. 12, 2012

Chapter 2 is up now!


RE: [Beyblade Story] Throughout the Beyges - Dual - Dec. 12, 2012

Cool chapter! Just a small tip, take some time to describe the forest, and the beyblades, among other things. But good chapter nonetheless! Also, since i know you personally, i can say this is good work for you! Keep it up!


RE: [Beyblade Story] Throughout the Beyges - Scout25 - Dec. 12, 2012

Thanks! I was planning to describe the beys in more detail a little later, but I understand. Like how would you have me describe the forest?


RE: [Beyblade Story] Throughout the Beyges - Dual - Dec. 12, 2012

Well there seems to be some uneasiness that the main character feels upon entering the forest. Talk about the eerie feeling, the darkness, etc. We should probably take this to pms now.


RE: [Beyblade Story] Throughout the Beyges - Scout25 - Dec. 18, 2012

I'm sorry for the wait, chapter 3 will be up by this Sunday.