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StormPegys Story (Please help think of a name)(NEED character requests) - StormPegy - Feb. 24, 2011

Hi all today i wrote a beyblade story
I need some help with a name.
And i really need some character requests
Make sure you tell me there names there beyblade
and are they good or bad.

Here are some notes about the story

Here is Chapter 1
Thank you nano for fixing it Smile
Please tell me what you think

Bye
From StormPegy


RE: StormPegys Story (Please help think of a name)(Taking character requests) - Nano - Feb. 24, 2011

I see a few spelling errors. Along with grammar errors.

I don't get one part. They had lunch, battled, then went to bed? Talk about a late lunch.


RE: StormPegys Story (Please help think of a name)(Taking character requests) - StormPegy - Feb. 24, 2011

(Feb. 24, 2011  6:36 AM)Nano Wrote: I see a few spelling errors. Along with grammar errors.

I don't get one part. They had lunch, battled, then went to bed? Talk about a late lunch.

Oh Can you please tell me where the few spelling errors and grammar errors are

"I don't get one part. They had lunch, battled, then went to bed? Talk about a late lunch"
Yea i think i will change the time when it starts and stuf

bye
From StormPegy


RE: StormPegys Story (Please help think of a name)(Taking character requests) - Nano - Feb. 24, 2011

When I get a chance I will fix the whole story. Right now I'm on my Wii. When I get on my mom's laptop I'll correct it for you. That is if you want me to...


RE: StormPegys Story (Please help think of a name)(Taking character requests) - StormPegy - Feb. 24, 2011

Thank's nano that would be great! Smile
i will try and make chapter 2 beter

Bye
From StormPegy


RE: StormPegys Story (Please help think of a name)(Taking character requests) - Nano - Feb. 24, 2011

It was the day before the biggest Beyblade tournament ever, and Karuwa and Adam were training hard so they could enter.
“GO Burn Bull” yelled Adam
“Dodge and then Attack Pegasus” yelled Karuwa at Galaxy Pegasus. When Pegasus attacked Burn Bull went flying out of the stadium
“I guess you win again” said Adam and went to pick up burn bull.
“Boys time for lunch” Called Dawn (Dawn is Karuwa’s mum)
“ I need to get stronger so I can beat you” Said Adam as they where walking to get some lunch.
“One day you will” Replied Karuwa.
After they finished lunch Karuwa asked Adam, “Want to go and train more?”
“Ok” replied Adam.
“ 3, 2, 1 GOO SHOOT!” The two of them yelled.
Pegasus instantly started circling the defense type Burn Bull
“Pegasus Attack!” Cried Karuwa
“Dodge it Bull, then Attack!” Cried Adam. Then Bull dodged the attack and attacked Pegasus, pushing it up to the edge of the stadium
“Pegasus get out of the way!” Yelled Karuwa.
but it was to late Burn Bull pushed Galaxy Pegasus out o the stadium
“I won I Won!” Screamed Adam
“What?” Asked Karuwa
“I won” Repeated Adam
“Congratulations you beat me” Replied Karuwa.
Adam ran inside yelling, “I beat Karuwa, I beat Karuwa” And he ran into the kitchen.
“Good, are you going to enter the tournament tomorrow?” Asked Dawn
“You Bet I am” Said Adam
“Well its getting late so why don’t you two go and get your Beyblades ready for tomorrow and then go to bed” said Dawn, and at that moment the boys ran up the there room to get there bey’s ready
“Have you got some spare parts?” Asked Karuwa
“Yes I think so” Adam replied.


Just fixed a few tings. Changed a few things. Nothing big.


RE: StormPegys Story (Please help think of a name)(Taking character requests) - StormPegy - Feb. 26, 2011

^^ @ Nano
Thank you so much Nano I will update the first post Smile

Bye
from StormPegy


RE: StormPegys Story (Please help think of a name)(Taking character requests) - Nano - Feb. 26, 2011

Just glad I can help Smile


RE: StormPegys Story (Please help think of a name)(Taking character requests) - StormPegy - Feb. 26, 2011

Does anyone have any character requests Please!!!

bye
From Stormpegy
P.S i will start chapter 2 today


RE: StormPegys Story (Please help think of a name)(Taking character requests) - Synth - Feb. 26, 2011

heres one:

name:aquios

bey:moonlight pegasis sr(sunrise)100rf(rubber flat)

looks:
[Image: f82e622.png]

special move:sun blazer(bey glows red,and melts everything in its way)

side:good


RE: StormPegys Story (Please help think of a name)(Taking character requests) - StormPegy - Feb. 26, 2011

@ Cyberpegasus98
Sure i will get aquios in the story Smile

Bye
From StormPegy
P.S what do you think of my new avatar Smile


RE: StormPegys Story (Please help think of a name)(Taking character requests) - howdodelete - Feb. 26, 2011

Here's one StormPegy.

Name:Reiki Hiwazara
Age:11
Clothes:A gray t-shirt with the Aries symbol on it,A gray and white hoodie,black jeans with a chain,a belt that holds his launcher grip and bey,black hair,a WBBA cap,and white and black slip on shoes.
BeyEeearth Aries CH120WD
Special Move:Iron Ram Attack,the bey turns into solid steel and hits the opponent out of the stadium.


RE: StormPegys Story (Please help think of a name)(Taking character requests) - StormPegy - Feb. 27, 2011

Ok EarthAries
i will get Reiki in the story

bye
From StormPegy


RE: StormPegys Story (Please help think of a name)(Taking character requests) - StormPegy - Feb. 28, 2011

CHAPTER TWO

Here
Bye
From StormPegy


RE: StormPegys Story (Please help think of a name)(Taking character requests) - StormPegy - Mar. 02, 2011

CHAPTER 3

I NEED some 6 more people for my story!!! (you can requeast more than one)
bye
From StormPegy


RE: StormPegys Story (Please help think of a name)(NEED character requests) - Chups - Mar. 02, 2011

Ha I'll have a go for a character.

Character name - Yohan Mikishura.
Beyblade - Stealth gnome UC125MSF.
Beyblade info- UC125 - Ultimate Control 125 MSF - Metal Semi Flat
Ultimate control means you can change the track height with a launcher he has.
Side- bad.
Special move - Stealth Gnome arrow.


RE: StormPegys Story (Please help think of a name)(NEED character requests) - StormPegy - Mar. 02, 2011

Thanks Chupa chups i neded more EVIL people Smile
Yohan Mikishura will be in it for sure

Bye
from StormPegy


RE: StormPegys Story (Please help think of a name)(NEED character requests) - StaticX - Mar. 03, 2011

Name:Tsuyoshi Rejji ( su-yo-shi)
Gender: male
Age:19
Beyblade: Electrode Watersnake W²P135 (Water/wind producer 135 ) EMFWD (Eternal Metal Floating Wide Defense)
Special moveEeelectric Field(Water splashes like waves then the stadium is flooded with water then the other bey's owner cannot see their bey but Tsuyoshi knows where hydra is since Tsuyoshi uses his senses. Then hydra creates high voltage then the other bey starts to lose spin but hydra is not affected since the track is designed to push away water and electricity by producing wind.Then, hydra smashes the other bey while the other bey is left soaking wet. Then Hydra's W²P105 track absorbs all the water then the battle is finished.)
Side:Bad


RE: StormPegys Story (Please help think of a name)(NEED character requests) - howdodelete - Mar. 10, 2011

Here StormPegy,since you need it.

You can make her whatever you want.Good or Evil

Name:Kat Mizumono
Age:9
Bey:Thermal Gemios WA130AS
Clothes:A red shirt and a blue hoodie,jeans,black boots,a red shoulder hand bag that holds all of her bey stuff,brown hair with a black headband,with a silver butterfly,and a necklace with the Gemios symbol on it.
Special Moves:FlameBlazer=a fire tornado that knocks the opponent out.
DiamondFrost=the bey is covered with ice and dashes around the opponent with an ice path following it that grows and falls on top of the opponent.
Elemental Force:The fire makes a giant tornado while the ice makes makes giant ice spikes in the air and the tornado closes into the opponent while the spikes fall towards it instantly stopping it's spin.


RE: StormPegys Story (Please help think of a name)(NEED character requests) - HellKerbecsDog - Mar. 10, 2011

Hey here is an evil character request.

Name : Makusouto Heminiko
Ethnic : Korean
Age : 13
Bey : Hell Kerbecs STS145MWD
STS = Steel Smasher
MWD = Metal Wide Defense
Moves : Hell Blast - A huge area of flames cover the whole bey dish and sends the bey flying losing its spin and power.
Hell Gate - 2 doors appear causing the bit beast to come out and get wrapped around by chains and bitten by Kerbecs.


RE: StormPegys Story (Please help think of a name)(NEED character requests) - StormPegy - Mar. 10, 2011

Thanks you everyone i really needed more people


bye


RE: StormPegys Story (Please help think of a name)(NEED character requests) - Chups - Mar. 11, 2011

Advertise in a Magazine or newspaper or 1 of The other Virtual newsUpdaters.


RE: StormPegys Story (Please help think of a name)(NEED character requests) - StormPegy - Mar. 13, 2011

^^^^ yea i should
i think i will


RE: StormPegys Story (Please help think of a name)(NEED character requests) - Kujikato - Mar. 14, 2011

here are 4 characters for your awesome story


Name: Izuma Inzori
Name: Sonai Inzori
Name: Rez Inzori



RE: StormPegys Story (Please help think of a name)(NEED character requests) - Sniper - Mar. 14, 2011

Name:Tenji Okana
Bey: Static Libra FM145 ESB
Static: it resembles the hyper wheel but its metal is shaped like lightning bolts
FM145:like the M145 track the beyblader is allowed to move the track to different side but FM 145 ffreely moves from side to side causing a static effect
ESB:like Es its a bit bigger with a free moving ball keeping the beys balance intact
character apperance: Like Tobio(capt.capri) just black with black hair
Personality:ecstatic and friendly
Special move: Cybernetic Shockwave -Due to FM145 it creates a heavy electric field out from the bey constantly shocking the the other bey with electric shocks causing the bey to lose balance and slow down then it it hits the bey like a lightning bolt for the KO
Hope you like it