Katsuya's Story~ Series 1~ G-Force

Poll: Do You like my Stories

Yes Your Good
68.75%
11
Its Ok Just do a little better
25.00%
4
Not The Best
6.25%
1
Total: 100% 16 vote(s)
You changed between present and past tense a lot in this chapter. Stay in one tense unless you have a reason to switch and are able to do it effectively. You also have some spelling mistakes, grammatical errors, and a lot of unneeded capital letters in it, so you might want to proofread it.
I noticed that there are some '()' , which is bad for stories.
Ya know , if ya were thinking, you do not need these marks, except this is a P.S.